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| If you opened your own restaurant, would you prefer to sell fast-food, or fancy food? Write a five-paragraph essay, giving specific reasons and details to support your answer. |
거북이 글
I don´t really know a lot of thing about what food will be the best to sell at the restaurant. But I went many fast-food restaurants ,like Mcdonalds, and know some benefits about them. Therefore,If I have my own restaurant,I´m going to sell fastfood. I have 3 reasons to tell you why.
First, people only want to have their foods as fast as they could. And busy people don´t have much time to eat. Also, fast-foods are very cheap. So people likes to eat fast-foods. Then I´ll have a lot of customers and I´ll earn a lot of money!
Second, there are less money to pay for the cooking utensils. That´s because fast-foods usually use simple ways to make.
At last, I need less employee for me to work in a restaurant. You know, when you go to Mcdonalds, for example, they make your food and you have to take your food and bring it to the table. You think it´s normal to do that, but I read it from the book and it said that it can reduce the amount of employee salary, because there is less work to do for employees.
As a resault, I´m going to sell fast-foods. And nowadays, people think fast-foods are bad for their health and don´t like to go to the fast-food restaurant. Maybe I´ll invent the fast-food which is good for our health and sell them in my restaurant! Then it will be a big suceed for me! |